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Judith Ashcraft's avatar

Whaaaat, the twist of it not being the wife after all! This gave me shivers!

Ashes Of Love Poetry 🔥's avatar

Thank you! So glad it got to you 😊

Gil Nobodi's avatar

The wife twist tore me up, Holy moly. Spectacular prose, enough that I need to recover from it, like all of the best poetry. 👌

Ashes Of Love Poetry 🔥's avatar

Aww thank you so much 😊 i love hearing that my work sticks with people.

Walt Shuler's avatar

Great job!

Nick Winney's avatar

desperate and dark!!!

Hylia Corvidae's avatar

I love this on multiple levels

The poetry format adds to the weight and the emotion of the encounter, the realization of what is really doing the haunting, what caused it, and the final acknowledgment from the narrator that they are receiving a judgement for their own acts, it just all comes together and hits so well. It hurts a bit, in all the right ways, and I feel it embodies so well the idea that the creature feeds on the guilt that comes from these wrongdoings

Thank you so much for being a part of this 💕

Ashes Of Love Poetry 🔥's avatar

Awww thank you for reading and catching all the themes. This is the style I write in for precisely that reason, every word matters and has weight, its very climactic and emotional. It really works for my purposes. For this one i wanted to highlight how guilt makes her stronger and how she's summoned to the guilty people. This was a super cool project so thank you for putting it together ❤️

Rebecca Watson (ReBe)'s avatar

I was lucky enough to get an early sneak peak and omg I forgot how great it was!! Amazing work Ashes 💚

Ashes Of Love Poetry 🔥's avatar

Thank you Rebe! I loved being able to get the early feedback before it was posted so thank you for that too😊

Rebecca Watson (ReBe)'s avatar

💚

Bea's avatar

Gah!!! This is amazing!

Margo Margan's avatar

Nice poem, I like the repetition of the word again. Putting it on its own line really makes it hit hard. :)

Ashes Of Love Poetry 🔥's avatar

Thanks for reading! I felt like it needed some emphasis because that was the torture. She just kept coming and not letting him sleep and he was beyond desperate at this point.

Alex J's avatar

Really cool, I loved the short sharp spoken feeling of the lines. It has an anxious feeling. It was cool having done the audio because I didn’t realise the last line came from you! It was like a thriller reveal for me or something.. it’s all connected!! 😳

Ashes Of Love Poetry 🔥's avatar

Thank you 😊 this is basically my poetry style but usually it's full stories instead of just snippets like this. That's so cool! I haven't listened to the audio yet but it's definitely next on my list.

GrousyGirl's avatar

Nice! Love the ending.

Ashes Of Love Poetry 🔥's avatar

Thank you! Just deserts are sweet huh 😈

Happy Nielsen's avatar

Yessss haunt them forever 👿

Ashes Of Love Poetry 🔥's avatar

Poetic justice really. An idea i love toying with 😈

Edward.Marlo.Ruiz's avatar

Super fucking dope and dark narrative poetry. Flows like blood from a fresh wound

RM Greta's avatar

Our first submission! Thank you so much!

I love how the wife will finally have her truth told. Well done 🤍